#WIPpet Wednesday and#ROW80 Update: Drastic Measures

I’m unexpectedly at home today, after falling off my bike halfway to work. I think I’m okay, though I have two rather large bruises on my right thigh. Earlier, my ankle was also causing me grief and my head was swimming when I walked, but that seems to have cleared up. The lovely folks at work have told me in no uncertain terms to not come back tomorrow unless I am feeling completely 100%, so we’ll see how I’m going.

I finished the first draft of Unicorn Love on Saturday. It only needed another 300 words or so, which goes to show just how lazy I had been in the week and a half prior. But anyway. Somewhat fitting that a story in which the main character is a cupid, and which explores the idea of true love, was finished on Valentine’s Day. That was the only Valentine’s Day-related thing that happened on Saturday, since the partner and I tend to ignore the day usually (though it is also International Give A Book day, which is something I can get behind).

The first draft ended up being just under 9000 words. However… I am not entirely sure if I am going to keep more than the first 2700-odd. It works really well up until the time travel happens, at which point it practically becomes a different story. At first, I was just trying to figure out ways to bring in aspects from the first part and tie it all together better, but my other problem was that I was having trouble coming up with an ending that was neither too easy nor too unrealistic (both of which were the case in the first version). I was driving a friend home after a theatre outing on Saturday evening and bounced some ideas off him. He has given me something to work with, though it will require deleting some stuff I’m quite partial to… I’ll have to see if I can work that in elsewhere. Either way, just as with AMCF, it sounds like the second draft of Unicorn Love will be drastically different to the first.

cupidOnto WIPpet Wednesday, and this scene follows the one I posted three weeks ago. Lydia is surprised that the Chinese boy and the girl in the bookstore are already together when she and Aphrodite spot them the next morning.

Lydia narrowed her eyes at Aphrodite. “Did you do something?”

“Lydia! I’m surprised you’d even suggest such a thing!” Lydia arched an eyebrow. “All right, maybe I gave them a little push.”

“I knew it.”

“But look at the boy! He’s beaming! And she is clearly smitten.”

“And how much of that is thanks to you?”

“Lydia, you’re not thinking about this in the right way. No wonder you’ve become disillusioned.” Aphrodite motioned for Lydia to follow and they continued past shops towards a crowded food court. “We are partly responsible for so many couples being brought together. Does that make their love any less legitimate?”

“I guess not. But why can’t you let it run its own course, once we’ve set it on its way?”

“Well, after today, I will. But while your job is simply to give prospective couples the push they need to come together, mine is far more complicated than that. I have to make decisions about which relationships should continue and which ones should end. I intervene a lot more than you know. But that doesn’t mean the rest of the work that couple does to stay together isn’t any less important, or that the tears that are cried when it doesn’t work out are less justified, just because I nudged it in one direction or another.”

“But the tears might have been avoided if you didn’t meddle.”

I realised while reading through the whole thing the other day that Lydia does an awful lot of eyebrow-arching. Something else for the second draft.

WIPpet Wednesday is hosted by K. L. Schwengel and you can find out linky here. To participate, simply post an excerpt from your WIP that somehow relates to the date. I posted 9 paragraphs because I added together the one and the eight from the eighteenth. A Round of Words in 80 Days is hosted by Kait Nolan, and you can check out the blog for more info. Now I’m off to do some uni work!

~ Emily

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19 thoughts on “#WIPpet Wednesday and#ROW80 Update: Drastic Measures

    • Emily Witt says:

      That’s very true! I came up with a new direction at work today (of course, not when I was on a break and could do anything about the sudden inspiration!). I’ve done a bit of work on it and I think the second draft should actually be done pretty soon.

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  1. kathils says:

    Gotta say, love Lydia’s logic. But it does bring up all sorts of questions about ‘true’ love, doesn’t it?

    Ugh! I hope you’re feeling much better. I have to say, I wish my co-workers would make me stay home some days! Of course, there are probably some wishing I’d volunteer to stay home. Ha!

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    • Emily Witt says:

      I find that ‘true’ love is a very tricky concept, and I really wanted there to be a basis in shared experiences/interests/etc, even with cupids and Aphrodite thrown into the mix. I think I struck a good balance.

      I went into work today (Friday) and everyone was making sure I was okay and telling me to stop walking about whenever I went somewhere, which is sweet of them, but really, I’m fine now.

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  2. Kate Sparkes says:

    Interesting situation, there. Makes you wonder about couples who make it to the altar and are then miserable years later. Who’s to blame? The being who didn’t make the call to let the relationship die an early (and heartbreaking) death, or the couple for… whatever happened?

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  3. Pax Asteriae says:

    Congratulations on finishing! Even with the thought of impending revisions, finishing at all is still brilliant, and with the joys of technology at least the bits you’re still partial to will live on in earlier versions of your files if they don’t make it into the final cut.

    Poor Lydia, I can see why she’s become disillusioned with the job, when Aphrodite can undo all her work… I do that it’s clear there are two sides to it though, and it’s not cut-and-dried why Aphrodite does it, because she has her job too.

    I hope you’re feeling better soon. Witch Hazel is good for bruises, but definitely take it easy for a while, especially if your head was swimming…

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  4. Erin Zarro says:

    So sorry you took a fall! Those are really not fun.

    Enjoyed your snippet. I use the “eyebrow arch” a lot myself. And, like yours, my drafts are very different when they are done. Sometimes they take a twisty path. 😉

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  5. Gloria Weber says:

    I hope your bruises are healing and you’re feeling better.

    Your snippet shows two sides to an argument well. I don’t know if that’s the theme or (sub)plot is to discover the answer, but it sure would be a good one. I also like that even though they don’t agree it isn’t a huge fight, but a calm debate.

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  6. shanjeniah says:

    Sorry it’s taken me so long to get to this – vacation consumed me!

    I hope you’ve recovered from your fall!

    Your snippet poses some very interesting philosophical tangles. I’m interested to see where it will lead us!

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