#WIPpet Wednesday – Daddy Issues


The five leads in ABCTV’s “ANZAC Girls”

Psst! This post got rather lengthy (like over 1000 words, lengthy!) so if you’re just here for the WIPpet, scroll down about halfway and you’ll find it! 🙂

So as part of the commemoration of the beginning of the First World War, the ABC has started showing a series called “ANZAC Girls” (that’s Australian and New Zealand Army Corps), which follows the stories of five women who enlist as nurses and operate in Cairo in 1915. A lot of the scenes in the wartime hospital in A More Complicated Fairytale are based on what I picked up when I was working at the Australian War Memorial, but I didn’t do a huge amount of secondary research, other than what I gleaned from reading the letters and papers that crossed my desk. What I have realised from watching the first episode of ANZAC Girls is that the hospital Cait works in, and that Felipe is admitted to, in AMCF is about the most sanitised wartime hospital in the history of ever. I’m pretty sure Cait never gets a drop of blood on her. So that’s something I plan on working in the near future.

In the meantime, though, I’ve been continuing on completing an outline for An Eventual Happily Ever After. Somehow I have managed this in spite of Superman being on TV on Saturday night and me realising that I am a fool to have never watched the Superman movies before and thusly downloading them and watching one a night (though I took a break last night, and I’m out tonight and tomorrow, so IV and the two newer ones will have to wait until the weekend). There are bits in my outline that aren’t great, and are sort of temporary “get-from-A-to-B”s, but at the moment I want to know how to get from A – Z and then I’ll figure out the nitty-gritty later. I’ll probably have to cut out one scene I really liked in the original NaNo draft, because I can’t see a way for them to logically get to the necessary location…

Actually! I take that back, I just took a break from writing this post, drew a rough map of the country in which most of the story takes place and the route Ginny and Peter will take through it, and it might still work. Which makes me happy. And drawing a map was a good idea, anyway.

Tangent: the pen I used to sketch said map is a LiveScribe Wifi Smartpen which not only writes what I tell it to, but also takes photos of it and converts it to a file it can sync to my Evernote account, and also records everything I say while I’m writing. Edy got it for me for my birthday because I’d been going on about it, and when I first got it, I was thinking, “Oh god, I just made my boyfriend spend an exorbitant amount of money on something that is really better suited to someone who’s going to lectures or meetings all the time and can make proper use of it!” and I was feeling rather guilty. But I just listened back to the audio of what I was saying while I was mapping and I actually think this might be a valuable plotting tool. Also I literally said “… and stowaway shenanigans can happen here” and then promptly forgot I said it until I heard it again, so there will probably be more amusing things like that. So basically have a pen and Dictaphone all rolled into one (the only real downside is it requires special paper printed at 600 dpi on a laser printer, so at the moment I’m being very conservative with the 50 page starter booklet).

wednesdaybannerSo! After all that, I suppose you are expecting a WIPpet. I am going to cheat slightly with my WIPpet math week, because I was typing this up on Tuesday night, which was the 12th of August, so I’m giving you 12 paragraphs. 😛 They’re kind of lengthy (though under 500 words all together), feel free to skim. This is the scene I was going to share last week. Tension between Prince Felipe and his father is hinted at towards the end of AMCF, but I expanded on it here. Felipe and Cait are supposed to be dining with the guests who attended their youngest daughter’s Naming Day ceremony. However, having just learned that Ginny has gone missing, they’re somewhat preoccupied.

It was when his friend reached the door that he noticed his father standing in the doorway. The King’s arms were crossed and he was frowning.

“Father,” Prince Felipe said, suddenly becoming less confident. Cait took his hand under the table. While he was known to argue with the King on many occasions, sometimes he still came across as a little boy in trouble when his father frowned at him.

“I have a roomful of guests wondering why their hosts are not at lunch. Would you care to explain?”

“Father, Cait’s sister has gone missing. No one has seen her since the end of the Naming Ceremony. Surely finding her is more important than a lunch held so that some nobles and diplomats can fuss over a baby who would much rather be left alone to sleep?”

King Gilles pressed his lips together tightly. “I would have thought that perhaps the prince would make an appearance, if not his wife.”

Felipe looked like he was about to keep arguing, so Cait intervened. “Perhaps you should discuss the issue with your father outside, rather than in front of everyone?” The last thing she wanted was for the King and Prince to have one of their many arguments in front of a roomful of the prince’s knights.

Prince Felipe nodded, and stood up. As he moved out of the room, King Gilles joined him.

“You can’t just decide you’re not going to turn up to an important function, Felipe!” the King admonished him in a low voice. “You have certain obligations!”

“My obligations are to my family, first and foremost!”

“That’s very noble of you, but as the Crown Prince, you have just as much duty to your position as to your family. You are expected out there.”

“I will go and meet those guests once I am certain that I have done all I can to ensure that Ginny is found. Once my men are out combing the city, then I will make my appearance.”

For a moment, the King and the Prince just stared at each other in the hallway, before Prince Felipe turned on his heel and made his way back into the meeting room. King Gilles was left to angrily make his way back to the banquet hall and try and placate his son’s guests until Felipe hopefully turned up.

Please join us for WIPpet Wednesday! All you need to do is post an excerpt from your WIP that somehow relates to the date, and then join up with us here. Thanks to K. L. Schwengel for hosting. 🙂 I’m going to head off now to continue working. See you all soon! 🙂



15 thoughts on “#WIPpet Wednesday – Daddy Issues

  1. shanjeniah says:

    Ooh – I like where Cait and Felipe’s lives seem to be. Then there’s that tension, and Cait trying to smooth it over…

    One little thing – both Gilles and Felipe “make their way” to their next destination in the same paragraph. Easy fix, though!


  2. kathils says:

    Go Felipe! I suppose I shouldn’t cheer for what passes as bad behavior and the shirking of duty, but sometimes other things are more important.

    That pen sounds awesome. I had a Fly pen when they came out. I was going to use it the other day only to find it’s no longer supported and has no drivers for my new system. 😦


  3. Elaine Jeremiah says:

    Great excerpt Emily. But I think I must have missed a few… are Felipe and Cait married with a child now? The previous ones I’ve read were where she wasn’t sure about him and they weren’t together, just verbally sparring.

    Anyway a lovely scene and I especially like how diplomatic Cait is being. Seems like she’s a sensible sort of person. 🙂


  4. Sirena says:

    I love the dynamic between the Prince and King here. The tension is great and I love how Cait is trying to smooth over the ruffled feathers. It’s a nice scene.


  5. Xina Marie Uhl says:

    Some tension bubbling over between father and son! Nice. LOL love the subject title. VERY appropriate! Also, I had a headdesk moment when I read “crown prince” as I’ve been trying to think up that phrase for days now as I work on my own fantasy novel. Don’t know why it just slipped out of my noggin so long!


  6. Amy says:

    I can really feel the tension here because I think both King Gilles and Felipe are both right, but neither is willing to give an inch to find a way to work it out.

    That pen sounds awesome…like a real-life version of a Quick Quotes Quill. LOL!


  7. Amelia E. Browne says:

    I really love the way you’ve created the tension in this scene however I find it unlikely that the two most powerful men in the country take their argument to a corridor rather than sending out everyone else in the room.
    Also, those pens are amazing! I’ve used them for work but unfortunately do not have one of my own. 🙂


  8. Eden says:

    You’ve got one of my dream pens!!!! *envious, but happy too*

    I have to say, I’m in the father’s camp. A polite, stop-in to let his guests know he’s happy they came and that he needs to leave for an emergency not only with keep feathers from ruffling, but also potentially gain him assistance for the matter, such as needing expedited travel in certain lands, extra eyes to look (I assume these nobles came with their own guard forces after all), and no “time limit” or need to rush and get back to his guests in a stressed state.

    A little delay now could save him lots of trouble in a later time. Also, sitting at a table and discussing plans such as this (doesn’t Ginny have a name the king already knows by this point instead of being called “Cait’s sister Ginny”?) doesn’t “feel” urgent. Something like this seems like it would be better suited to a hall-way.


  9. Beth Camp says:

    Lots of conflict between father and son. I was wondering, though, if they call each other, King Gilles and Crown Prince Felipe. Sometimes using those formal names slowed down the intensity of the confrontation for me, but Felipe is making decisions and setting priorities, even if they run counter to what his father would wish. The suggestion above to have him make a quick visit seems a diplomatic solution, perhaps one in keeping with his own future skills as king. I enjoyed reading all of this post. Nice to know how hard we work when we least expect it — while drawing!


  10. ReGi McClain says:

    Hmm… I must look up that pen.

    What an interesting dichotomy. On one had, as a husband and father, Felipe really should be most concerned with his own family. On the other hand, his royal position demands he be concerned with everyone else first. Sounds like a lousy position to me.


Talk to me! :)

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in:

WordPress.com Logo

You are commenting using your WordPress.com account. Log Out /  Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out /  Change )

Connecting to %s

This site uses Akismet to reduce spam. Learn how your comment data is processed.