I wasn’t actually planning on doing a mid-week check-in this week, but when I was writing last night a question came up and I would like some advice on it.
Without giving too much away, the scene I posted for yesterday’s WIPpet basically leads to Cait getting taken prisoner by the Gallit men. Cait then spends a lot of time in the back of the wagon they throw her in, then in a cell, then unconscious for a bit. It’s other characters (like Meg) who are doing all the important stuff at this point to ensure Cait gets rescued.
The thing is, though, of course, that the entire story up until this point has been told in third person limited from Cait’s POV. Last night I was writing a scene when Cait and Meg are reunited and Meg was filling Cait in on all the things that had happened, but it was very much in the form of
Cait: (asks question)
Cait: (asks another question that stems from that answer)
Meg: (answers that one)
… and so on for a good 500 – 750 words or so. And I mean, there is a time and a place for a good info dump, but I don’t think this is it.
So my question is, would it be strange, 20000 words or so in, to break from Cait’s POV and perhaps switch to Meg’s for a while. Probably only for 1000 words or so, at which point it would return to Cait’s and probably stay there. There might be one other scene that would work from Meg’s, but I think Cait’s reactions are probably more important to that bit.
I’m also having a bit of an issue with the setting, in that in my head the clothes worn by the characters and the buildings and that sort of thing are all quasi-Regency period, and the wartime stuff is more reminiscent of the Napoleonic Wars than anything else. But some of the technologies they use are more Victorian (they have cameras and newspapers, for example, and that magic show that Cait and Ginny go to at the beginning definitely feels closer to turn of the 20th century than the 19th). But I think the best thing to do here is just ignore the earlier-period stuff in my head, and update my descriptions so that everything fits that later period. I don’t go into huge descriptions of clothes or anything like that, so it would basically be a case of ensuring aforementioned technologies don’t feel out of place.
Anyway, I think that’s it from me for today. Thank you in advance for any comments and suggestions.