#WIPpet Wednesday and #ROW80 Check-in

*dons sentimental hat*

You know what I realised after posting last week’s WIPpet Wednesday post? That I have only actually been a part of this group for two-and-a-half months, maybe three at the outside. But I feel like I’ve been a part of it forever. You guys are awesome. ♥


Well, Wednesday has come around againa and for today’s WIPpet I’m taking you back to Operation: Sugarplum, which I’ve added another few thousand words to over the past week and a half, including one scene that was rather action-packed and of which I was rather proud, since I don’t normally write action; usually the drama in my writing is character-driven.

These 22 lines take place just after Clara, Max and Drosselmeier have crosesd through the portal to the kingdom Max and Drosselmeier are from. Not many people actually know about the portal, so when they hear footsteps coming up the hill, they all take cover. This takes place after the person they heard has turned up and opened and gone through the portal for herself.

Drosselmeier’s expression was grim as he wiped dust from his coat. “Max, this is worse than we thought.”

“I know.” Max had stuck his hands into his trouser pockets and was already pacing the cave.

“Would someone like to tell me what my housemate is doing in your kingdom?”

Max nearly fell over mid-step and both his and Drosselmeier’s heads whipped around to look at Clara. “Your housemate?” Max repeated.

“Yes! Lauren Pirlipat. How do you know her? Why are things worse than we thought?”

Max looked at Drosselmeier, but his uncle just raised his eyebrows, clearly expecting Max to answer the question. Max took a deep breath. “Remember how I said I dated that girl who turned out to just want to know the ins and outs of the company?”


“That was her.”

“Lauren’s your ex-girlfriend?”

“Yes,” Drosselmeier chimed in, “and she’s seen everything there is to see inside our headquarters.” He frowned at Max, who averted his eyes. “Had it explained to her in minute detail, in fact.”

Spot the reference to Hoffman’s original Nutcracker story if you can! Also, someone remind me to go back and edit that other scene so that Max ends up with some kind of injury to his jaw (really, that’s all you need to say to me and I’ll know what you’re on about :D). And while you’re at it, remind me to acknowledge the blogging awards I’ve received over the past couple of weeks.

row80come and join in

On the writing front, I wrote 4500-odd words last week, and had I added this up earlier, might not have been so lazy on the weekend and made it to 5000. But 4500 is still good. I’ve got ten days to write 5000 words and reach my 15000 word goal for May. You may have noticed that my Story A Day In May goal kind of dropped off. I just wasn’t feeling inspired and if I’m writing nearly 5000 words on my WIPs each week, I shouldn’t have to feel guilty about not doing other writing on top of those, right? I think I’m just going to write flash fiction whenever the mood strikes me, and not really worry about sticking to a schedule (I say this because a scary dream I had in the early hours of this morning kind of inspired me so maybe something will come of that…)

I wasn’t able to come up with anything related to the theme for this month’s Australian Literature Review short story competition, but I do have an idea for the June one, so I’ll probably try to outline that soon enough. I still need to finish the outline for Making Friends with Enemies, too. Having said that, I don’t really want more than two WIPs to work on at once, so there’s not a huge rush for that, but after having the story in my head for nearly 18 months, it would be nice to know exactly where it’s going to go.

Speaking of outlines, I still haven’t actually written one for Operation: Sugarplum, mostly because for a while it was writing itself and I was just winging it. It’ll probably keep doing that a bit once I get past my current snag, which isn’t really a snag, just a case of not being able to properly coherently describe my version of the Sugarplum Fairy. I know who she is and what she does, but the characters sound funny when they say it.

The second draft of A More Complicated Fairytale is at the point where I’ll be copying and pasting bits and pieces from the first draft that don’t need to be changed a whole lot. Apart from a couple of scenes where I need to add things in, and flesh things out or alter things slightly, a lot of it is going to remain the same. Up until a bit towards the end where everything changes again.

Oh! And did I mention I signed up to be a sponsor for the next ROW80 round? Pretty psyched about that. I have basically said that I would do it as soon as I figured out something to write for an inspirational post. And I did, so I signed up! 😀

Finally, on a completely irrelevant note, how about that Doctor Who finale, then, eh? :O 😀

And now I go back to doing what I’m being paid to do. Join in the ROW80 fun here and the WIPpet Wednesday fun here (regarding participating in the latter, all you need to do is post an excerpt from your current WIP that somehow correlates to the date, eg. 22 lines on the 22nd). Have fun and I’ll see you soon!

~ Emily

29 thoughts on “#WIPpet Wednesday and #ROW80 Check-in

  1. kathils says:

    A sponsor! Cool. Makes me think I’ll have to join the next round of ROW80 as well. 😉 Although I’ve been seriously bad about keeping up with updates and stopping by to cheer the other ROWers. I may get kicked off the boat soon.

    Great excerpt. Builds some nice tension. I love this last line: “Had it explained to her in minute detail, in fact.” Ooh, I can just hear the tone of voice and see the look accompanying that!


    • Emily Witt says:

      I’ve been a bit lacking in that area myself, so hopefully being a sponsor will give me the kick I need!

      Ooh, yeah, Uncle Drosselmeier is Not Pleased! Which leads to Max getting Defensive*. He and Max actually managed to get into two arguements within a week’s worth of writing. Clara’s going to be sick of having to shut them up before too long.

      *Clearly channeling my inner A. A. Milne here with Random Capitalised Words.


  2. Kate Frost says:

    I love the line ‘Would someone like to tell me what my housemate is doing in your Kingdom.’ and the last line’s great too. A bit of a predicament they’re all in now and I wonder what Lauren Pirlipat makes of it all?


    • Emily Witt says:

      Thanks, Kate! Poor Clara is just SO confused at the moment, things are getting weirder and people keep forgetting to clue her in. I have to admit I’m not entirely sure how Lauren is going to react when they confront her, haven’t actually planned that far, but it should be interesting!


  3. katemsparkes says:

    I don’t know what the reference to the original is, but “Pirlipat” is like, the best name ever. Just saying.

    I love the tension here. Somebody’s in trooooouuuuublllle…


    • Emily Witt says:

      Well, Hoffman will have to get the credit, since that is the reference in question. 🙂 Princess Pirlipat was kind of a bitch in the story (“Oh… you’ve been cursed with the ugliness that you just cured me of? Actually, I don’t think I want to marry you anymore…”) so I figured she would make a good enemy agent.


    • Emily Witt says:

      I was actually going for Pirlipat, since I have posted excerpts mentioning Drosselmeier before, but that was a while ago and I’m not sure you were following me at that point, so you can get points for that as well. I’m curious though, the dusting the hands off was just a line that I wrote. I have a terrible mind for details (which probably sounds silly since I’m all, “Yay, references!” and references are all about the details), what made you suggest that as a possibility?


      • L. Marie says:

        Hi. Oh sorry. Yeah, I’m a recent follower. Also, I was thinking of the fairy dust in The Nutcracker and thought the dusting was an oblique reference to that.


      • Emily Witt says:

        No need to apologise, it’s all good! Once you explained it, I could totally see why you would associated the dust with the fairy dust. The fairies are going to make an appearance of their own eventually, I just have to figure out exactly how their magic works and why it’s different to Max and Drosselmeier’s.


  4. elaine jeremiah says:

    Well done you for getting so much writing done. I really enjoyed the excerpt from ‘Operation: Sugarplum. I feel just like Clara’s feeling – what on earth is going on? I hope to find out in the not-too-distant- future. 🙂


    • Emily Witt says:

      She is so very confused right now! As far as she knew, she was only involved in strange things as of last night. Now it seems strange things have been going on since Lauren moved in a few weeks ago, and she’s had no idea. Hopefully it won’t be too long a wait, but I have to actually figure it out for myself first!


  5. ReGi McClain says:

    Hey! You granted my wish. 😀 I’ve never read the original book, so I didn’t catch the reference. I’ll have to read it before you release this one so I can catch all the nods.


    • Emily Witt says:

      I would say you’ve probably got plenty of time! Haha. If you have an ereader, there’s a fairly cheap edition on Amazon which has both Hoffman’s original and Dumas’ version, which was basically fanfiction, under the guise of a translation (I say that having not actually read it yet, but that is the impression I get from reading things about it). The full title is The Nutcracker and the Mouse King.


  6. Eden says:

    Good use of tension here. Not sure of the reference, but it just means I have more reading to do 😀

    Hooray for being a sponsor! It’s a lot of fun, really! I’m doing it again next ROWnd too.


    • Emily Witt says:

      Haha, indeed! It is a cute little story, doesn’t take too long to get through.

      I’m pretty excited! I’ve been a bit slack on the supporting other ROWers front, so hopefully this will give me the kick I need.


  7. Leslie R. says:

    Fun scene! I’m guessing the reference is just Lauren’s last name, but if there’s another reference I missed it. It’s been a looong time since I read the original.

    Yay for being a sponsor!


  8. Raewyn Hewitt says:

    So glad I caught this one. I’m loving the idea of the room mate ex. Deliciously complicated!

    The Dr Who final doesn’t screen until next Thursday here and I can’t wait. My friend watched it online the other day and is almost turning herself inside out not giving out spoilers. This season has been excellent and I can’t wait until the 50th anniversary episode. If the build up is anything to go by, it’s going to be awesome!


    • Emily Witt says:

      Thursday?! That’s so far awaaay! It will fill you with glee, and dread, and utmost confusion, and then more glee! I’ve loved this season, too, and considering how much hate for the show there is lately, always love running into someone who is also still enjoying it!


      • Raewyn Hewitt says:

        I know – that’s what my friend keeps saying. Fortunately (or not depending on your point of view) we are going through a crazy hectic season, so the time will probably fly. You know unless the doctor drops by and whisks me off to next thursday…

        What’s with the haters? I love running into others who love it too. Must talk again next Friday!


    • Emily Witt says:

      Thanks Debbie! I’m going to make myself read the original Nutcracker story properly once I finish the book I’m currently on. So after that I might be able to do some more work on this one and there might be some more snippets!


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